We walked silently for a while and then sat down in the sand. The sea seemed to grow quiet as she began to tell me about Ted.

I never doubted that she had loved me, and she probably didn't realize how grateful I would always be for that gift. I sensed how important this saying of the words was for her so I made no effort to stop her. Instead I brushed the first tears from her cheeks and tried to keep her long hair, teased by the warm evening breeze, from obscuring her young and beautiful face. She was nervous at first, her voice trembling as she made the effort to explain the surprises of her heart for the first time.

I didn't know her Ted but I envied his good fortune in capturing the interest of this fascinating girl who was almost a woman. I made a little prayer that if he should ever make her hurt, she wouldn't hesitate to break his balls.

It was dark when we started back to the car, making arrangements for her departure from my arms and my care. I made the obligatory offer of my bed evermore but I trusted that she would have the strength and good sense to never come back.

A little test post for this board.

Something old and never finished.

Not a bad story for a Newbie Will. Ha Ha. Looks like you and I are the first ones here. Glad to have you aboard.

tom

Hey, Tomper.

Is this thing active? Or just up for consideration?

It works a lot better than the other one except for that 'flood control' nuisance.

I just got an e-mail from Gene, and came over. I assume it is active, I think everyone will come over here eventually. hope so. I like this a lot better allready.
At least you can edit on this site. I felt like an idiot over there, not being able to correct anything.
Tom

Hey there. This board can be the replacement for the Writer;s Refuge board if that's what folks want. Obviously this has the features working that are missing from the other board. I just didn't want people getting upset about the things that weren't working over there.

Folks can decide if they want this board over the other and away we'll go.

It's not that bad Tom. Of course there was that one, small runaway skigine incident.... :D
Thanks.

A good start. Just arrived so having a look-see.

My thanks to Gene for all of his effort. He is not at all mean .

but I enved : envied

Isn't there a Romance section for you old softies?

Hi Will...!

Is the tense correct in the quote...start? started?

...also

I like your sketches, the brevity and soft thoughts.

Nikki

Thanks, LJB.

Changed the tense. Actually, this was in present tense when I pulled it up from my archives. Posted it just as a test of this new forum, quickly changing the tense before doing so. Never intended to leave it up.

Will

Leave it up I like it.

Reads well.

ffox

Will, Very sad story. Reminds me of when I was a teenager, and she said (As they always did) "We can still be friends, can't we?" and I thought, "I've heard that before...and tomorrow it disappears like sand through the hour glass.
Sad...But it happens. Good job Will!
Pat

This is the start of something good, Will.

I think you should expand this, make it in to something bigger. It has a very good feel to it, and I think you can make it a grand piece.

Have to agree with the above quote.
I cant wait to read the real you Will. These flashes are just too short...

Will,

I agree with Killian and mmm, and as you admit this is an unfinished work...keep going man, keep going.

The imagery and emotion were seen and felt by this reader. Except for the few niggles others picked up on, I thought this was very moving and could be bigger.

Yes, I'm new, but not one to not voice my opinion!

Opal