(I think my thread I started with my fan fiction got deleted. So Im starting a new one. If it hasnt been deleted and, it is still on here...Im sorry. By the way, Concrit is accepted.)


Chapter 4-The Profesy


As a new day is Dragon city began. Jayson and, everyone else began to do their daily chores around the stables. Jayson and Beau were assigned to clean up the track. Connor came over to Jayson and, told him what to do. Ok, Jayson. I want you and Beau to both clean up the track like last time. Jayson looked at Beau and, smiled. And looked at Connor and, said. Don't worry Dad. I can handle it. Connor smiled. That's my son. Connor then walked back into his office. Lance was surprised that Jayson had no problem cleaning up after the Dragons. Hey, Jayson. How come it doesnt bother you cleaning up after the Dragons? (Said Lance). Jayson smiled and, said i'm used to cleaning up after animals. Jayson then felt a tap on his shoulder and, heard a growl that startled him. Jayson looked up and, saw it was Beau. Of course. None of the animals I cleaned up after were this big. Said Jayson.


As Jayson and, Beau took off to clean the track. Connor called everyone else back. Minutes later Artha, Lance, Parmon, and Kitt were all in Connor's office. Listen everyone. Artha and, I have already talked about this. And, I figured you all should know to. I have reason to believe that Jayson was sent here for a reason. They were all surprised (accept Artha). What do you think he's for Connor? (Parm asked). When I was being raised by the Dragon Priest. Tannis told both me and Word Paynn of a profesy. About a worrier that could create sounds into a weapon. And, that could be Jayson. You mean like, the music Jayson plays from his guitars? (Said Kitt). Artha looked at all of them and answered. We don't know. It just said noises. That could mean anything from a guitar to a Dragon roar. Connor looked up and, said. I have to talk to Tannis about this. Befor Word Paynn tries anything. Lance looked at his father and, said. But, we haven't heard from the Paynn's even since Moordryd helped us out with Jayson's things. Connor looked back at Lance and, said. I know. But, we know what Word Paynn and the Dragon Eyes can do. I better get to Tannis before He Does. WAIT, said Kitt. We have to tell Jayson what's going on and, tell him about Artha as the Dragon Booster. Connor gave an unsrue look and said. I'm not so sure about that. Kitt, rolled her eyes and said. Oh come on. You guys remember how I got mad when you guys didn't tell me. There was a moment of silence. Then Connor said. Get Jayson in here now.


Minutes later Jayson and, Beau arrive. What's going on everyone? Son, sit down. There is something we need to tell you. What is it? Well, it's 2 things actually. 1 is, you know this Dragon Booster you have heard of? Yes, of course. Well, Artha is the Dragon Booster. And, Beau is the Dragon of Legend. Jayson was very shocked to hear this news. And, why did you take so long to tell me this? Connor, felt a little guilty and, just said. We didn't want to stress you out more then you already are. Jayson looked at the ground for a while then lifted his head back up and, said. Ok, I can appreciate that. Connor was relieved. He can rest easy the fact that Jayson doesn't hate him for not telling him. Now Jayson, you can't tell ANYONE about this. Jayson chuckled and, said. Who would even believe me anyway? They all kind of chuckled and, Kitt said you got a good point. Artha however didn't see the humor. HEY!!! Jayson stood up and, said. Artha think about. People think that the Dragon Booster is this tough man with some of the best fighting abilities. Who's going to think its a 16 year old boy? No offence. Artha thought about it and, realized how true that is. Ok, you do have a good point.


Well, now that that's settled. We have to tell you the second thing. Minutes later after Jayson was told about this profesy. Are you sure its me? (Said Jayson). Connor looked right at Jayson and, told him "None of us aren't sure". But, I want to take you to see my mentor, Tannis. He knows more about this then I do. He's the one who told me about there being another Dragon Booster. Jayson looked confused. So he asked Connor. But, why wouldn't he tell you more about this worrier of sounds? I don't know (Connor said). Maybe he just thought that there was so little about this worrier that he didn't think it was worth getting all excited about. All I know is. I have to figure this out before Word Paynn does. Jayson was even more confused then ever. Who is Word Paynn? Lance tapped Jayson's shoulder and, told him. He is the father of the guy that helped us move you in. So Jayson asked. So then what's the big deal? His son seamed like a nice guy. What's so bad about his father? An hour later Jayson was all up to date about Word Paynn, his plans, the Dragon eyes, even how Connor grew up with him. Jayson just stood there and, didn't say anything......Finally after the long pause he looked at Connor and, said. Lets go visit Tannis then. Connor nodded his head and, said. Alright, come everyone lets go. They all geared up and, headed out. Connor then looked at Jayson. HEY JAYSON!!! Grab your guitar. Wich one? I dont know. Just pick one. He grabbed both his bass and guitar. Then headed out.


As soon as they left. Moordryd Paynn steps out from behind the stables. Father, I have all the information. Verey good my son. Report back to my compound immediately. As Word logged off from his wrist com. Moordryd thought about what his father could do to Jayson. I'm not sure what to do (Moordryd said). Should I tell my father the truth.....or not?


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to be continued...

I like your story so far but here are a few suggestions that you should consider,

1. you need to check your spelling and puctuation

2.you should have quotations when someone is talking and skip a line so its easier to read

besides those two things its pretty good but you seem to be rushing the story a little. Remember, this is [your] and you can take as much time as you need to write it. Good luck. :dance:

Oh yah, you spelled the title of the first chapter wrong. Its spelled P-R-O-P-H-E-C-Y

Thank you for you compliment. As for spelling and punctuation. When I spelled Prophesy. I went to dictionary.com and, thats what it gave me. Plus, although my computer does have the proper tools for spell check. Im suppose to enter this 25 digit number thats on the manual to my computer. And, I lost it. So when I realized that my hotmail account had spell check. I used that. But, I guess I type to fast for it to keep up. But, what do you mean when you said take me time??? What do you think I should do???

I'm just saying, it seemed like you rushed a little when you wrote it. But anyway keep up the good work and update soon. I can't wait to see what will happen next.

*facepalm* If you're going to use dictionary.com to spell check could you at least...really use it? Look I appreciate the attempt and all but that was half an attempt, at that, assuming you are not lying. 'Cause, you know, you spelled it "Profesy," not the "Prophesy" you insist is correct.

Also, "Prophesy," is a verb (and also dead annoying to use); "Prophecy," is a noun. Pay attention if you use dictionary.com! On of the first things it says is the word's part of speach!


For instance:

Verb: He prophesied that there would be a great cataclysm.
Noun: The prophecy which he gave indicated there would be a great cataclysm.

The Prophet prophesies (verb) the Prophecy (noun).
The Prophet deliveres (verb) the Prophecy (noun).


and all the spelling is starting to look funny now because of the pro-ph-e, or pro-phe seeming to be more prop-he.

Im doing the best that I can with what I got.

No, you aren't.

And as for needing the code on your computer manual, why don't you, well gee, I don't know, call up the company?

Failing that I'm sure you could find a cracker on the internet for it, though P2P programs or mIRC might have a better success rate.

Good news. I have actually teamed up with Shreakin to actually bring you PICTURES of my Fan Fiction. Well...Mostly they are pictures of my charecter Jayson Sinick. But, I htought vissual aid sounded like a cool idea. We will have the first picture up soon.

And it will be deleted again if you don't edit the header, which is now compulsory, into your first post. And, given your track record, I'd suggest that you discourage concrit.

I hope I did that right. If not let me know. By the way LightningFlash...Thanks



I havent gotten a chance to do another fan fiction because, I was recently diagnosed with Diabetes, was in a car crash, and worst of all...My Cat Died. So I took a leave of absence from writting. But, here is the next chapter in "The Sinick Chronicles".
Chapter 5 "Journey To Tannis" (Part 1)


"Come on everyone. We are off to visit my old mentor, Tannis." Conner said as
Artha, Lance, Parmon, and Kitt were all riding on their own Dragons. While
Connor and, Jayson were riding in carriage that was being pulled by Connor's
carriage dragon named Sayble. Jayson had this expression on his face that looked
concerned. What is it Jayson? Asked Artha. I just keep thinking about how much
my life has changed within a weak. I mean, I don't even know anything about this
place. Artha smiled and, said. Don’t worry. We'll fill you in. Just ask us
anything. Jayson looked surprised. Really? Artha chuckled and, said sure.
Everyone else chimed in and, gave their encouragement. "OK then. Besides Dragon
racing. What else do you guys do for fun?" Jayson asked Parmon turned around
and, said. "Well, we have a mall that has lots to do." "Really? Like what?"
Jayson asked. Well, it has an arcade, movie theater, music store, clothing
store, and even a guitar Shop. Really? They have all of
that? And, much more." Said Parmon. "I'm really curious to check out all of
that. But, what type of movies is here?" Jayson asked. Kitt turned back to
Jayson and told him. "DC Cinema offer a wide verity of comedy, classics, drama,
action, adventure and my personal favorite..romance." All the boys accept for
Jayson and, Connor turned around and, said "YUCK!" Jayson soon asked "What about
horror?" "Excuse me?" Kitt said in response. "Horror you know scary stories."
Jayson said as Kitt looked repulsed. "You actually like all that stuff?" She
asked "Yeah, I love going to a theater and, getting scared." Jayson said.
Everyone looked shocked even Connor. "What? What is so wrong about horror?"
Jayson asked as Connor looked at Jayson and, said. "Its disturbing. The fact
that someone can think of these acts and then portray them on film...that is
sick." Jayson chuckled and told everyone. "There is a saying that says. 'We all
think criminal thought. We all just don't act criminal
acts'. Anyone can think up these criminal acts. Im sure you have all done that
at one point too. "

They all were silent as they really started to think about it. Then finally
Connor just said. "OK, Glad we understand each other." Jayson soon asked "So
then moving on. What do you guys have for food?" "What do you mean?" Lance
asked. "Well, what do you guys eat?" Lance looked confused and said. "I never
heard of any of that stuff." Jayson was shocked. "WHAT!?" Lance then broke out
laughing and said. "I'm just kidding. Of course we have all of that stuff. 1 of
the best things there is to eat are Draconi Yum Bars." "What the heck is a
Draconi Yum Bar?" Jayson asked confused. "Only the best candy bar ever. Even
most Dragons love them." Lance told Jayson as Beau turned his head with
excitement and nodded his head at Jayson then so did Wyldfyr, Cyrano, Fracshun,
and Sayble. Lance reaches into backpack and, hands Jayson one. "Here try
it...Before the dragons." Lance said as Jayson took it out of the wrapper and,
just took a bight... "Hey, this is good!" Jayson said happily
"Good to know that you like it." Lance said "Well, what's the weather like
here?" Jayson asked. Artha looked as Jayson and asked "Well, what happens to the
weather where your from?" "Well it rains, snows, gets windy, hot, hum...." Artha
cuts him off and, says. "Don't worry we got that too." Jayson soon asked "Well,
then. What about Holidays? Like Christmas, Easter, thanksgiving, valentines
day." Artha said. "We got all of those accept for Thanksgiving and Valentines.
We also celebrate birthdays as well. As for those other 2. You'll have to fill
us in later. Anything else you would like to know?"

"Yeah, one last thing...What about concerts?" Jayson asked "Yep, of course.
and, yes we do have heavy metal music." Artha told Jayson "Awesome! Now I just
got to find a band that I will like." Jayson said excited Everyone one broke out
laughing. But, there was one person that wasn't laughing. Watching them high
above was Moordryd Paynn and, his Dragon Eye crew. Moordryd was on his com link
with his Dad Word. "I want you to capture him and, bring him back to my citadel
at once." Word said as he logged off Cain asked Moordryd. "So what are your
orders?" Moordryd paused then 5 seconds later... "Get him."

To Be Continued