It was rather amusing that you had Mortis as the drunk driver. :) Nice punchline. I'm not sure, though, if this is humorfic or a realistic depiction of what could happen to the characters. Pyrrah doesn't strike me as the type to go into law enforcement, somehow. Perhaps a bit more elaboration? It wasn't quite...funny...enough to be humorfic, but as it stands it wasn't a realistic depiction of "what could happen" either. It could have been a dystopian future where all of our main characters were somewhat mind-controlled and had had a choice between becoming part of The System or death in The Camps, but I didn't get that vibe either.
I think the spelling's improved since the last fic I saw from you. Notes:
"Officer" is capitalised when it is a title (ie. refers to a specific person). "Officer Khatah," "Officer X". It isn't capitalised when it is used to refer to any person (the officer).
"Sun City" and the other city sectors are always capitalised. "Work Town", "Mid City," "Precinct".
"Hijack" actually doesn't relate to the word "high".
Watch the tense changes. You go from "Khatah SAID" (past) to "Khatah TURNS" (present). Neither tense is inherently inappropriate, but you have to keep it consistent.
A "mage" is another word for 'magician', and it is pronounced "mayge", long "a" as in "age". I believe the term is "mag-jumped", "mag" pronounced with short "a" as in "apple". "Mag" derives more from "magnetism" than "magic".
Twenty years on, Cain would be around thirty-seven, not twenty-seven. Most of the canon characters would be between thirty and forty, and Connor and Word would be in their sixties. Remember that.
Dialogue tags. "He said," "she ejaculated," "they gasped," "it cried," are all part of the same sentence as the dialogue and are not capitalised. "This is right," she said. "Is this also right?" she asked. "Yes!" he yelled with frustration.
"However, when there is no 'he said' attached, there is a full stop." He walked to the other side of the room. "You're describing things other than how I said what I said, so it's a separate sentence with its own capital letter and full stop."
"This example is correct," he said. "There was a full stop, and a new sentence began."
This link is a useful grammar guide. Hope it helps with my pitiful explanation above. :)
Watch "you're" "your" confusion. "You're" is an abbreviation of "you are". "Your" is a possessive." Think "you are" for "you're" in order to see if you're (you are) correct in your grammar (that belongs to you). YOU'RE (you are) going to wash YOUR hair (the hair that belongs to you) tonight.
Is COM an acronym? For Communications Of Mag-importance, perhaps? If so, then it is capitalised. If it is simply a device, then it is not. Also, "comm" is the more common spelling, in my experience. ("He spoke into his comm.")
Also, you were missing a few commas. Some of these grammar rules are difficult to explain, because native-speakers tend to pick these up by instinct. But think of where natural pauses would belong if you were saying a sentence aloud, and also examine clauses. (Clauses are parts of sentences.) Sometimes, a sentence is broken up into two different parts, and especially if the different parts could be sentences on their own (ie. have a subject and a verb), a comma is necessary.
It is "Mortis" not "Morits". Spelling a canon character's name wrong is one of the most heinous things you can do to make yourself look bad, as it implies you don't even know your own fandom let alone the English language.
So this is not bad and a sincere effort. Try to put more description in your work. EXPLAIN what's happening, especially if your setting is something like 'twenty years from now'. You could have included little details such as, "From where they were patrolling, they could see the Governor's Sun City citadel rising into the distance," or "Lance looked over to where his old home had been. It had been twenty years since Word Paynn had destroyed it, but he still kept the ritual of glancing over to it." In a way your story feels
blind, because the reader just can't tell what's going on. You need information about the characters' motivations and surroundings. Not that some stories don't work when they're told in a very bleak manner, but as with you this seems less a conscious style choice than the act of a beginning writer I'd recommend working on more description and elaboration.